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I’ve been to many places in china . for example , HK , Peking , Hangzhou , Nanjing and so on .HK is a busy city , everyone here every minute doing their works , they even haven’t free time ! but in Hangzhou , there’s no too much work to do , everyone feels relaxed , and this is a beautiful city , I want to go to the beauty west lake again . the second largest city is Peking , there , you can visit the Palace Museum or the Great Wall , that’s wonderful !
Now , let me tell you about my family . in my family there are three people , my father ,my mother and I . my father is a teacher and my mother is a businesswoman . my father always cooks diner for us everyday and after meal my mother washes the tableware . where am I ? of course , I’m doing my homework . : ]
This holiday , I’ll stay home and learn how to play tennis --- my father will teach me .
Sometime , I think about my future . I dream to be a businessman , because if I successful , I’ll have many more money . It’s only my dream ,but I haven’t known what I would to be . : ]
Hallo , my name is David , I’m a 16-year-old boy , born in September the thirtieth ,nineteen ninety . I always speak Chinese at school and at home , but I can speak a second language , that is English . At school ,I have many subjects, like maths, science , Chinese, art, PE and so on .There are kindergartens, primary , junior, high schools and universities in china .Time flies ,and I’ve finished my junior education . I like playing PC games and listening to music in the past ,but now, I like to walk alone in the park .
I’ve been to many places in china . for example , HK , Peking , Hangzhou , Nanjing and so on .HK is a busy city , everyone here every minute does their work, and they even haven’t any free time ! But in Hangzhou , there seems not too much work to do , everyone feels relaxed , and this is a beautiful city , I want to go to the beauty west lake again . the second largest city is Peking , you can visit the Palace Museum or the Great Wall there , that’s wonderful !
Now , let me tell you about my family . in my family there are three people , my father ,my mother and I . my father is a teacher and my mother is a businesswoman . my father always cooks diner for us everyday and after meal my mother washes the tableware . As for me ? of course , I’m doing my homework . : ]
in this holiday , I’ll stay at home and learn how to play tennis --- my father will teach me .
Sometime , I think about my future . I dream of being a businessman , because if I am successful , I’ll have much more money . It’s only my dream and I still don't know what I would be . : ]
1.September the thirtieth 去掉the，读的时候要用，写就不用写。
2.but I have second language , this is English 改成but I have a second language,that is English.
3.There’s改成There're
4.I like to walk改成I like walking
5. everyone here every minute doing their works 改成everyone there has to do their work all the time比较通一点
6.haven’t 改成don't have
7.there’s no 改成there isn't
8.this is a beautiful city 改成that is a beautiful city
9.diner是这样拼的dinner
10. where am I ?这样说是中国式的英语，应该说What am I doing ?
11.many more money 改成much more money,因为money是不可数的
12.It’s only my dream 这句话不通，但是怎么改都不好