好之旅传销信息:帮我看看这篇文章有没有语法错误

来源:百度文库 编辑:查人人中国名人网 时间:2024/03/28 17:16:55
如题The news media is developing on the internet
The classic ways to read news are reading newspapers, magzines or listening to the radio.But in recent years, with the popularize of the internet, many people begin to use the computer to do this.
Some of the famous Chinese comprehensive websites now are 163,SOHU and SINA,on which there are a lot of newlyu reported news about entertainment,society,legendary figure,international situation and so on.
There are many advantages to read news on the internet.For example, the possibilities to read newspapers in different languages, to know the important events all over the world immediately and to see the different opinions of people of all walks of life about one piece of news by seeing investigates on the internet.And the most important thing is that this can save your money from buying newspapers or magzines and this will not waste any paper. This can be also called 'An action of enviroment protection'.
But every thing has its advantages and disadvantages alike.Some unhelthy websites sometimes reports some fictitious news to absorb the readers and it will lead the readers to a wrong way. So when the readers are choosing the news on the internet they should be more careful.
My classmates, you may use your spare time to read the news on the internet to enrich your view, this is a very useful advise to all of you.

以下是我对你的这篇文章的一点个人意见;)
1.题目
按你的字面意思是想说网络作为一个新的新闻媒介正在发展中,但你的表达不符合英语的表达习惯,我建议改成:Internet---the developing news media.
2.你的文章里面多次用到了read news,我认为不是很好,你看是不是可以用get informations来代替呢?
3.第一段里面,”旧的方法”应该是”the old way”,classic的意思是”经典”,用在这里不合适.另外,listening前面的or应改为and,这里是陈述,不是疑问.
4.第二段开头太乱,可以改成: 163,sohu and sina are are some of the popular comprehensive websites now in China, on which there are ```` 就可以了.
5.第三段倒数第二句应该把里面的this```改为in this way,you can save``````and will waste no paper.
enviroment应该改为enviromental.
6.第四段第一句的alike可以删去, absorb是”吸收”的意思,”吸引” 可以用interest.
7.最后一段,我想这样表达可能更好:I know everyone of us may use our spare time to get informations on the internet to enrich our views and I hope my speech will be a piece of useful advise for all of you!
另外还有一些拼写错误我就不一一指出了,希望我的意见能对你有所帮助:)

1。with the popularize of the internet中的popularize后该加 -ed。

2。其他的的没看出来。写的挺好的,向你学习。

强啊.我都看不懂啊!