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(Firs of all, this is a very good article. Since it is posted for correction, I would try my way as following.)

All Men Are Created Equal
“We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness”. These words come from the Declaration of Independence. Since Thomas Jefferson wrote the words more than 200 years ago, these words have exerted great influence on the value approach of people all around the world. Whenever people or their governments resolve social affairs in which different interest (profit) groups are involved, these words will become an indispensable moral standard to judge their acts or decisions. Gradually, this value approach even becomes a faith. But there are always some phenomena which seem to contradict with this faith. People are in different situations when they were born. Furthermore, the society always makes some naturally feeble people in a more disadvantage position. Then people begin to consider it as a maneuver of politicians or just an unpractical daydream. Should we keep believing in it? What should we do if we do not want to make the faith in vain?
Creator creates us equally. Some men were born wealthy (wealth), some were poor; some men were born white, some were black; some men were born healthy (health), while some were disabled. These are facts that even an unsophisticated child knows. If men are not the same when they were born, how can we say “all men are created equal”? People were born with different sorts of abilities and capacities, and sometimes some are even disabled. We can not deny people are different (the) when they first came to this world, and we also can not deny some differences are handicaps to people. But differences and handicaps do no mean unequal. There are some points to improve this point of view.
Firstly, differences are not definitely bad. Sometimes people with colored skins (shins) are discriminated by some white people (white) and short people are teased by tall gays at all times. People always have the tendency to define what is good and what is bad without thinking about why they do this. In fact, white (White) and black are just two neutral things in this neutral world. There is no good or bad when white and black came to the world. No one has the right to name white as good and black as bad. And the judgment of good or bad made by some parts of people will not accept by all men in the world.

“We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness”. These words come from(动词用得不妥） the Declaration of Independence. Since Thomas Jefferson wrote the words more than 200 years ago, these words have exerted great influence on the value approach（这儿名词修饰名词意义含糊） of people all around the world. Whenever people or their governments resolve（用词不当） social affairs in which different profit groups（利益集团？） are involved, these words will（时态不合适） become an indispensable moral standard to judge their acts or decisions. Gradually, this value approach even（汉语式的句子） becomes a faith. But there are always some phenomena which seem to contradict with this faith. People are in different situations when they were born（表达欠妥）. Furthermore, the society always makes（措辞不当） some naturally feeble people in a more disadvantage position. Then people begin to consider it as a maneuver of politicians or just an unpractical daydream. Should we keep believing in it? What should we do if we do not want to make the faith in vain?
Creator creates us equally. Some men were born wealth, some were poor; some men were born white, some were black; some men were born health, while some were disabled. These are facts that even an unsophisticated child knows. If men are not the same when they were born, how can we say “all men are created equal”? People were born with different sorts of abilities and capacities, and sometimes some are even disabled. We can not deny people are different the when they first came to this world, and we also can not deny some differences are handicaps to people. But differences and handicaps do no mean unequal. There are some points to improve this point of view.
Firstly, differences are not definitely bad（不知所云）. Sometimes people with colored shins（表达错误） are discriminated by some people white（错） and short people are teased by tall gays at all times. People always have the tendency to define what is good and what is bad without thinking about why they do this. In fact, White and black are just two neutral things in this neutral world. There is no good or bad when white and black came to the worl（英语语意含糊）. No one has the right to name（用词不当） white as good and black as bad（汉语句子）. And the judgment of good or bad made by some parts of people will not accept by all men in the world.

很想修改，但是实在是困了。

All men are created equally.
“We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equally, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness”. These words come from the Declaration of Independence. Since Thomas Jefferson wrote the words more than 200 years ago, these words had exerted great influence on the value approach of people all around the world. Whenever people or their governments resolve social affairs in which different profit groups are involved, these words will become an indispensable moral standards to judge their acts or decisions. Gradually, this value approach even becomes a faith. But there are always some phenomena which seem to contradict with this faith. People are in different situations when they were born. Furthermore, the society always makes some naturally feeble people in a more disadvantage position. Then people begin to consider it as a maneuver of politicians or just an unpractical daydream. Should we keep believing in it? What should we do if we do not want to make the faith in vain?
Creator creates us equally. Some men were born wealth, some were poor; some men were born white, some were black; some men were born health, while some were disabled. These are facts that even an unsophisticated child knows. If men are not the same when they were born, how can we say “all men are created equal”? People were born with different sorts of abilities and capacities, and sometimes some are even disabled. We can not deny people are different the when they first came to this world, and we also can not deny some differences are handicaps to people. But differences and handicaps do no mean unequal. There are some points to improve this point of view.
Firstly, differences are not definitely bad. Sometimes people with colored shins are discriminated by some people white and short people are teased by tall gays at all times. People always have the tendency to define what is good and what is bad without thinking about why they do this. In fact, White and black are just two neutral things in this neutral world. There is no good or bad when white and black came to the world. No one has the right to name white as good and black as bad. And the judgment of good or bad made by some parts of people will not accept by all men in the world.

我发现了几个错误，但是基本上都对啊，