格鲁吉亚篮球超级联赛:麻烦大家看看这个课后练习都那些地方有错,并更正过来,谢谢

第三行Have改成had或直接去掉.
will go 改成would come这是过去将来时,而且你应该是在中国吧!
第四行firstly最好改为First,include改为including
第五行have改成has,two room改成two rooms.
My parents live a room. other a room is us. 改为My parents will live in a room.The other room will be ours.
Scondly改为second.
say about three meal改为talk about three meals
Breakfast at 改为breakfast is at
it’s a egg, a milk and a break.改为we usually have an egg,a glass of milk and a piece of bread.(你要写的应该是面包吧)
Lunch at 和Supper is 改为lunch is at 和supper is at
not only 和have调换一个位置
soup 前的a 去掉
we和also 中间加一个will
Most importance is you don’t forget my address.改为the most important thing is that you'd better not forget my address.
welcome to you go here anytime改为welcome to come here anytime.

Your best friend 建议你改为yours或yours truly

说实话,错误还真很多.不过你最好还是再去问问老师.

Dear Jack,

Hi! Good morning!

Yesterday, I was told that you would come to China and stay with us. I am very happy.

First of all, let me introduce my family. There are three people in my family: my mom ,my dad and I.
My house is not very big. We have two rooms. When you come , my parents will sleep in one room, and we will sleep in the other.

Second, I would like to tell you about the three meals. We eat breakfast at 7:00am, which usally includes an egg, milk and bread. We eat lunch at 12:00pm. Most of the time we have rice and dishes. Dinner time is around 19:00. We not only have rice and dishes, but also soup. In case you get hungry when staying up late , we will prepare a lot of food.

Oh, by the way . I’m still an undergraduate . I’ll graduate soon. hehe .

Last but not the least: Don’t forget my address.

Building No 16,
Unit 5, Room 201
Zhengyi road
Xuanwu District,
Beijing city, P. R. China

We will welcome you with our open arms anytime!

Your best friend,
Yu Wang

Hi, Jack

Good morning!

Yesterday, I heard that you would come to china and live with us. I was very happy. Welcome you to come.

Firstly let me introduce my family. There are three people in my family, including my parents and I.
My house is not very big,but it has two rooms. when you arrive here,my parents will take one,and the other is for us.

And then ,tell you something about three meals.We will have the breakfast at 7:00. it includes an egg, a glass of milk and some bread. Lunch will be provided at 12:00, most of the times it includes rice and dishes. Supper are usually ready at 19:00. we have not only rice and dishes, but also a soup. of course, if you like to stay up all night, we can prepare food taken late at night.

Er, by the way . I’m still a student now,and I’ll graduate soon.

follow is my address.

Room 201
Unit 5
Building No 16
Zhengyi road
Xuanwu District
Beijing city

Finally, welcome to you go here anytime!
best regards!

Your best friend
yuWang

Hi, Jack

Good morning!

Yesterday, I heard you would come to China and live here with us. I was very happy.

Firstly let me introduce my family. There are three people in my family, including my parents and me. My house is not very big, but it has two rooms. If you come here, my parents will live in a room. The other room is for us.

Secondly, let me talk about the meals. Breakfast is at 7:00. There are eggs, a cup of milk and a break. Lunch is at 12:00; most of the time is rice and dishes. Supper is at 19:00. We not only have rich dishes, but also have a soup. Moreover, if you like to stay up the whole night, we have also prepared a lot of food.

Er, by the way. I’m still an undergraduate now, but I’ll graduate soon. hehe !

The most important thing is you cannot forget my address.

Room 201
Unit 5
Building No 16
Zhengyi road
Xuanwu District
Beijing city

Finally, welcome to my house anytime!

Your best friend
Yu Wang

改正了一些语法与时态错误，以及一些句子的表达方式。有质量保证！呵呵~~

was 该成am第3行
建议你把GO换成COME第3行
第4行：该成there are 3 people in my family,including....
第5行：but there are2 rooms;my parents will live in one room,the other owns to us
第7行：3meals,milk 不可数去掉a,.......错真的有点多哦。你最好找老师详细的改下

Hi, Jack

Good morning!

Yesterday, I heard that you'll be staying at my place during your visit in China. I'm extremly delighted.

First of all let me introduce my family. There are three people in my family, including me and my parents.
My house's with two rooms, not very big. You'll be sharing a room with me as the other is for my parents.

Secondly let's talk about the meals. Breakfast'a at 7:00. It contains an egg, cup of milk and a break (bread???). Lunch's at 12:00, mostly with rice and chinese dishes.Supper starts at 19:00. On top of rice and dishes we'll be serving hot fresh soup. If by any chance you'd like to stay up all night, we have plenty of food on reserve ready for you anytime.

Er, by the way . I’m still an undergraduate now. but I’ll graduate soon. hehe

Now,most important of all, be sure to take down my address:

Room 201
Unit 5
Building No 16
Zhengyi road
Xuanwu District
Beijing city

Finally, a big welcome to you and i really look forward to your arrival.

Sincerely,
Yu wang
Your best friend