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请IELTS高手改一下作文,请把语法及文章结构等错误明确指出,越详细越好,谢谢。(writting老师请给打个分)

The table shows the number of foreign visitors(in millions)to 7 countries. Write a report for a university describing information shown below.

Country visited Total From the UK From the USA
Australia 3 0.3 0.3
Canada 15 0.6 12.0
France 53 7.4 0.1
Ireland 4 2.1 0.4
Italy 20 1.2 1.8
Mexico 7 0.1 5.5
Thailand 6 0.3 0.3

The table shows the total visitors that received by seven countries, and also detailed the visitors from the UK and the USA. Each of the patterns shows those figures apparently.

The visitors from the UK and the USA makes the same figure on both Australia and Thailand, which was 0.3 million. But Thailand got 6 million for total figures, which was just the double times of the total of Australia.

53 million visitors made their way to France. But only 4 million visited Ireland, which is also a European country. Most of those two countries’ visitors were from the UK. 7.4 million went to France and 2.4 million went to Ireland, only 0.1million and 0.4 million USA visitors went to France and Ireland respectively.

Canada almost received double times visitors compared to Mexico (15 million from Canada and 7 million for Mexico). And visitors from the USA nearly occupied the total number of Canada and Mexico, with 12.0 million visited Canada and 5.5 million made their way to Mexico. Compare with the USA, the UK only shared a small cake of the total figure. Which was 0.6 million for UK and 0.1for Mexico.

Italy got 20 million visitors in total, 1.2 million were made by the UK and 1.8 million visitors were from The US.

Overall the table shows that the France got most visitors and Ireland got the minimum. The UK visitors tends to European countries and the US visitors are tendency towards to America.

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The table shows the number of foreign visitors
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