查人人中国名人网左权家书读后感:请简要点评一下这篇四级作文,帮它打个分数吧
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Dear fellow students:
Our school's student Union is gong to organize a volunteer activity this coming summer vacation and now recruiting volunteers.
The volunteer activity's purpose,contents and arrangements are as follows: The aim of the activity is to raise more money to help those who suffer from the cancers and can't afford the high expenses of treatment.
Volunteers need to make volunteer performances and talk people into contributing the money. We will assign volunteers to different places to raise money.And specific time and places will be published later on.
The volunteers we need must have good speaking ability and know how to communicate with the local people and passers-by. If you think you have the ability,please contact the student union as soon as possible.The telephone number is ********
The mobile phone number is ***********
student union
80分.
写的有些句子是中国式英语,不符合地道的英语说法,看着有点别扭.但是总体能把想要表达的思想传达出来.写作技巧和语法有待提高.
能把意思说清楚，但语法掌握不太强，没有更好地展现给读者；评分是76。
看看这里好么？http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/11304861.html
75分 硬伤如下：
volunteer（s） needed
Dear fellow students:
Our school's students Union is gong to organize a volunteer activity this coming summer vacation and now recruiting volunteers.
The volunteer activity's purpose, contents and arrangements are as follows: The aim of the activity is to raise more money to help those who suffer from the cancers and can't afford the high expenses of treatment.
Volunteers need to make volunteer performances and （persuade） people to （contribute with） money. We will assign volunteers to different places to raise money. And specific time and places will be published later.
The volunteers we need must have good （lingual） ability and know how to communicate with the local people and passers-by. If you think you have the ability, please contact the student union as soon as possible. The telephone number is ********
The mobile phone number is ***********
student(s') union