自贡工商局九鼎:帮我看看英语作文吧!

来源:百度文库 编辑:查人人中国名人网 时间:2024/05/08 19:07:15
Nowadays, almost all the senior high school students want to enter universities, which has become a tendency in our society. Have you thought about the reason? As far as I concerned, there are at least three causes as follow.

As we all know, China is developing rapidly in recent years and that will continue for decades. While our economy is going up , our diathesis also needs strengthen. Studying in universities can not only broaden our outlook but also strengthen our knowledge system, which is beneficial for us.

The next is that the competition in our society become much severer than before. It is certain that the higher degree you’ve got , the more chance you may have to obtain a job in some global companies around the world. So we can see that entering university is a main work needing now.

The third reason is that entering universities to get higher education is not a reachless dream now. Plenty of colleges have appeared in China and some new universities has founded around us. We have no reasons to refuse such good chance , have we?

As a conclusion, the tendency to advancement is certain ,which leads education’s development . It is for this main reason that more and more students want to enter universities.

"As a conclusion" 不太好,可以说as a consequence
另外你写得太长了,高考不需要写那么长的!

We have no reasons to refuse such good chance , have we?
改为do we?

第3行,应该为as far as I'm concerned

good!