查人人中国名人网q版泡泡堂7小游戏:两篇英语文章
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各位网友请评论一下小弟的这两篇英语文章，有什么不妥尽管指出来
Dear Jane :
Where are you now! Are you ok? I miss you very much.
I know you dosen't well in study,then you leaved your home.Don't be unhappy,I think I can help you to 提高你的成绩。
Don't be out,ok?There is less safer and comfuteble than home.your parents,students and teachers are worring about you.I hope you can come back soon.We are friends also,ok!We all welcome back anytime.
yours
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Last Monday, I visited to TaoHuaYuan.There are more places of interesting. I felt very excited. When I came into the Gate.Lost’s of flowers were full my eyes. I stepped on the green glasses .It was very comfortable. I think if there was my hometown. How nice there was!
Dear Jane :
Where are you now! Are you ok? I miss you very much.
I know you dosen't well in study,then you leaved your home.Don't be unhappy,I think I can help you to 提高你的成绩。
Don't be out,ok?There is less safer and comfuteble than home.your parents,students and teachers are worring about you.I hope you can come back soon.We are friends also,ok!We all welcome back anytime.
yours
***
Last Monday, I visited to TaoHuaYuan.There are more places of interesting. I felt very excited. When I came into the Gate.Lost’s of flowers were full my eyes. I stepped on the green glasses .It was very comfortable. I think if there was my hometown. How nice there was!
1.does’t要改成don’t，因为是第一人称
2.leave的过去式是left，不是加ed
3.应该是comfortable，不是comfuteble
4.students应改成classmates或friends
5.是worrying不是worring
6.不是We all 应该是all of us
7.全文有太多的OK，不太流畅
1.visited后面不需要加to
2.应该是were不是are
3.是lots of 不是Lost‘s
4.glasses是玻璃的意思，应该是grasses
天啊！你是几年级啊！也过多错误了吧！上课要好好听讲喔！要是你这样去考试的话起码扣2分喔！