蘑菇街 女外套:大家给看看这篇英文作文有没有错误？

Hello！Everyone. I’m Cindy, not Sundae. The sundae is made in McDonald’s, but I was born in TianJin. Haw-haw, only a joke.
I’m six years old. I’m in grade one . Pink and purple are my favorite colors . My good friend is Garfield, it’s a cloth toy.
My father always calls himself a second hand scientist. He is a computer engineer. My mother is a manager. I like painting. I’m studying gouache now.
In 2008, I will be eight years old. I want to go to Beijing to participate in the inauguration ceremony of the Olympic Games.

the right way 中的the要写为The.My father always call himself he’s a second hand scientist.我认为可以改为My father always call himself is a second hand scientist.
你 今年一年级,作文写的真棒

I want to go to Beijing to participate in......

(Hello,)everyone. I’m Cindy, (not) Sundae. The sundae is (made n) McDonald’s (whereas) I was born in TianJin. Haw-haw, ( it's)only a joke.
I’m six years old. I’m in grade one . Pink and purple are my favorite colors . My good friend is Garfield, it’s a cloth toy.
My father always call himself a second hand scientist .( I agree with that as) he is a computer engineer. My mother is a manager. I likes painting (and) I’m studying gouache now.
In 2008, I will eight years old. I want go to Beijing (and) participate in the inauguration ceremony of the Olympic Games.

You can link all your sentences together to make it more fluent.:) good luck!